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Influence of computers on us
It is true in a modern industrial society that computers have influenced on our lives and work very deeply.The picture above shows a thought-provoking phenomenon.It is a chain that links a mouse to a computer.
When talking about modern technology,such as cars and computers,we always quote an old saying:a coin has two sides-a good one that is intended and a bad one which is foreseen.On the one hand,the use of a computer helps us save much time,which can be used to do other things.On the other hand,many youngsters indulge in computers to such an extent that they lost self-control.They always stay before a computer in an internet bar several hours,sometimes one day.If lets the situation to continue,the next generation will lost the power which help them face the dramatic competition in the future.
It is high time to put some measures to improve the tendency.In my view,the effective solution to this problem depends on the effort made by government and schools.Firstly,the government ought to make a proper policy concerning setting a limit to the internet bar.Secondly,teachers in the middle school should help their students know the merit and shortcoming of web addiction.

电脑带给我们的影响
在这个高速发展的工业社会,电脑给我们的生活和工作带来的影响是实实在在的.以下这幅图片就展现出值得我们反思的社会现象.那就是用鼠标将电脑连接起来所产生出来的问题．
当说起摩登的工业时代,象汽车和电脑,我们总是用那句俗话来诠释：一个钱币都有好的积极的一面,还有不好的消极的一面．另一方面,电脑可以帮我们节约很多的时间去做别的事情．当然,也有许多未成年象一些中学生,他们在电脑世界中容易迷失自我,失去自控．他们经常呆在网吧中持续几个小时,有的时候是整整一天．如果让这种现象再继续下去,我们的下一代将没有勇气面对活生生的充满竟争的现实社会．我们要衡量这种现象,改变这种现状也需要很长的一段时间,以我的观点,最有效解决此问题的方法是需要国家和学校能制定些律例,以此来做出努力渡绝问题的发生．首先,国家应该制定些管理条例来约束经营性的网吧．第二,中学的老师们应该帮助他们的学生来认识网络的优势和劣势．