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求老师帮忙改两篇文章 看看有没有语法错误
Recommend a place to visit
I have been to Lijiang twice.Each time i went there,I have many different feelings.The Old Town of Lijiang is one of the most wonderful place to visit and take a trip.If you are going to Lijiang,you will feel nothing is important.
Back in February of this year,I went there with my family.The trip was relaxing and interesting.People in Lijiang are very passionate.They like singing and dancing very much.When i came across the beautiful city,the songs was played everywhere in the old town.While my parents was taking photos,I found a peaceful store called ”May Day”.I have never see a store as special as this.They sell a lot of special pictures,but it’s a shame that my mom haven’t agree with me to buy one.
Lijiang is a really good place to travel.If you need some advices about the travel,I may help you!
The first time I saw Teddy bear is in a film called Mr.Bean.I’ve wanted to have a Teddy bear since I was three.
On my forth birthday,my mom gave me a surprise——she bought a Teddy bear and gave it to me.I was really happy when i saw it.
The Teddy bear is my favorite thing from my childhood.I like it so much because I have had this more than 10 years.I slept next to the Teddy bear every night until I was about ten.Even though it’s too old,i still love my Teddy bear.But to be honest,it’s true that we may never use the Teddy bear again.I really want to keep it until i become an adult.
I was grew up and the toy was old,but they really bring back sweet memories.
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求老师帮忙改两篇文章 看看有没有语法错误
Recommend a place to visit
I have been to Lijiang twice.Each time i went there,I have many different feelings.The Old Town of Lijiang is one of the most wonderful places to visit and to take a trip.If you goes Lijiang,you will feel nothing is important.
Back in February of this year,I went there with my family.The trip was relaxing and interesting.People in Lijiang are very passionate.They like singing and dancing very much.When i came across the beautiful city,the songs were played everywhere in the old town.While my parents were taking photos,I found a peaceful store called ”May Day”.I have never seen a store as special as this.They sell a lot of special pictures,but it’s a shame that my mom haven’t agree with me to buy one.
Lijiang is a really good place to travel.If you need some advices(advice不可数) about the travel,I may help you!

The first time I saw Teddy bear is in a film called Mr. Bean.I’ve wanted to have a Teddy bear since I was three.
On my forth birthday,my mom gave me a surprise——she bought a Teddy bear and gave it to me.I was really happy when i saw it.
The Teddy bear is my favorite thing from my childhood.I like it so much because I have had this more than 10 years.I slept next to the Teddy bear every night until I was about ten.Even though it’s too old,i still love my Teddy bear.But to be honest,it’s true that we may(删去) never use the Teddy bear again.  I really want to keep it until i become an adult.(grow up可能更好)
I was grew up and the toy was old,but they really bring back sweet memories.

写得很有感悟啊  能多给我点分么  我看了好久哎