帮忙挑下语法错误,最好有用得不好的单词句子也调整一下

帮忙挑下语法错误,最好有用得不好的单词句子也调整一下
it is one of the most unpleasant discoveries that none of us human beings can escape from the fate of death at some point.Even if a man is able to avoid accidents and illness taking away his life,the process of ageing will still inevitably lead him to the graveyard.However,it is lucky for us to live in this twentieth century,because modern civilization has grown into such a stage so that we can expect to live longer than our ancestors.Although not all of modern men can enjoy longer lifetime than their forefathers’,the average has indeed increaded greatly,because of less competition with Nature,yet better food supply,nutrition advice,and medical care.
We might tend to forget the harsh condition in the early days,when there was no air conditioner in the burning summers nor gas in the freezing winters.One might argue that today’s comfort spoils us,but there’s no denying that we no longer fear the heat and chill that had killed a lot of human beings in the old days.
Moreover,as people start to think of possible ways to extend their lives,attention is brought on the subject of health food.In fact,there has been a profession specialized in studying the best meal plans for men under different physical and mental conditions,and it is fairly easy for any common people to get these scientific nutrition advice.We are eating more and more healthy in the wish to live longer.
While both improved living conditions and health food advice help us to slow the process of ageing,modern medical facility prevents us from accidents and diseases.Primitive medical care was unable to save lives even from a deep cut or flue,while modern medical services are just about mighty.We have saved countless lives from car accidents,fighting,gun shooting,etc.and conquered a number of diseases that used to be fatal in the past.Although there are still diseases like cancer and AIDS that cannot be cured,it is always possible to make the remaining time a little longer using modern therapy.
To sum up,people in the twentieth century can expect to live longer than people who lived in bygone times,thanks to modern civilization,especially modern medicine.

第一个字母大写,有的你可能忘了!语法还不错,单词有些用的不太恰当,我也不好给你拿主意.你不给这篇作文起个名字吗?
It is one of the most unpleasant discoveries that none of us human beings can escape from the fate of death at some point. Even if a man is able to avoid accidents and illness taking away his life, the process of ageing will still inevitably lead him to the graveyard. However, it is lucky for us to live in this twentieth century, because modern civilization has grown into such a stage so that we can expect to live longer than our ancestors. Although not all of modern men can enjoy longer lifetime than their forefathers’, the average has indeed increaded greatly, because of less competition with Nature, yet better food supply, nutrition advice, and medical care.
We might tend to forget the harsh condition in the early days, when there was no air conditioner in the burning summers nor gas in the freezing winters. One might argue that today’s comfort spoils us, but there’s no denying that we no longer fear the heat and chill that had killed a lot of human beings in the old days.
Moreover, as people start to think of possible ways to extend their lives, attention is brought on the subject of health food. In fact, there has been a profession specialized in studying the best meal plans for men under different physical and mental conditions, and it is fairly easy for any common people to get these scientific nutrition advice. We are eating more and more healthy in the wish to live longer.
While both improved living conditions and health food advice help us to slow the process of ageing, modern medical facility prevents us from accidents and diseases. Primitive medical care was unable to save lives even from a deep cut or flue, while modern medical services are just about mighty. We have saved countless lives from car accidents, fighting, gun shooting, etc. and conquered a number of diseases that used to be fatal in the past. Although there are still diseases like cancer and AIDS that cannot be cured, it is always possible to make the remaining time a little longer using modern therapy.
To sum up, people in the twentieth century can expect to live longer than people who lived in bygone times, thanks to modern civilization, especially modern medicine.