这是一篇作文,希望能有老师帮忙改改,一定要正确的啊!最好能再加几句!

这是一篇作文,希望能有老师帮忙改改,一定要正确的啊!最好能再加几句!
What a good teater
During our life,there are lot of people who come into our live and have some fluence on it.The teacher is the biggest.if you ask someone what a good teacher,ithink diffrent people has diffrent answers.Follow is my opinion.
A good teacher should love teaching,if he or she doesn't love their work,and won't able to make their students' love study.Secondly,a good teacher should have a good sence of humor to them with all the difficulties of teaching.Of course,the responsiblity is also important for a good teacher.If a teacher doesn't responsiblity.how students'to improve?it's destroy students'intristing!
At last,a good teacher needs sleep enough!only has good body,it can teaching well!
In the finally,i hope every teacher has a good health and do well in working!

标题有点问题,你想表达“什么是好老师”这个意思吧?用what a good teacher is陈述语序或What is a good teacher?疑问语序
正文：During our life,there are lot of people who come into our live and have some fluence on it. "lots of people"或"a lot of people"不可混用.live改为life,表生活.句末it指代不明.The teacher is the biggest.有点别扭,是想表达老师的影响最大吗?可以改为Among them our teachers play an important part.
if you ask someone what a good teacher,ithink diffrent people has diffrent answers.Follow is my opinion.
修改后：If you ask someone what a good teacher is,I think different people have different answers.The following are my opinions.主要的问题：句首开头字母大写,different拼写错误,谓语动词单复数错误,表达用语有点问题.
A good teacher should love teaching,if he or she doesn't love their work,and won't able to make their students' love study.下文出现了secondly,前面就得补上Firstly.A good teacher should love teaching后面用句号,和下面一句断开.and去掉,改为If he or she doesn't love their work,maybe they won't be able to make their students love study.
Secondly,a good teacher should have a good sence of humor to them with all the difficulties of teaching.表达意思不明,them 指代什么?有时候一句复杂的话无法准确表达出意思,不如用两句正确的简单句表达会好些.修改意见：Secondly,a good teacher should have a good sence of humor to their students when they meet with some difficulties in studying.
Of course,the responsiblity is also important for a good teacher.改为：Of course,responsiblity is also a vital quality to a good teacher.前面用过important,最好不重复,用vital代替,意思是至关重要的.quality意为品质.
If a teacher doesn't responsiblity.how students'to improve?it's destroy students'intristing!
intristing是什么?是兴趣吗?用interest,名词.原句意思有点啰嗦,可以这样改,连着上一句：Of course,responsiblity is also a vital quality to a good teacher which may arouse students' interest of studying. 激发学生的学习兴趣,这样表达意思就到了.
At last,a good teacher needs sleep enough!only has good body,it can teaching well!
In the finally,i hope every teacher has a good health and do well in working!首先,去掉at last,与后面final重复,改用what’s more或moreover连接.a good teacher needs sleep enough改为a good teacher needs enough sleep .need sth.这个搭配是接名词,sleep enough是副词修饰动词,不妥.only用在句首,句子要用倒装句式.改为：Only has a good body can a teacher teach well. In the finally 错误用法,用finally就可以了.health是不可数名词,不用a.整体改为：Finally,wish the teacher good health and everything is all right with work.
(以上是我的回答,希望对你有用.给你提个小小的建议：千万注意拼写、大小写、单复数这些细节的地方,因为它们最能体现你的学习态度哈 ：D )