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帮我评价评价这三篇作文
这是我们高二的一次英语考试,请评价评价这三篇,哪个好,好在哪里?又不好在哪里?满分30分,请打分!
第六部分 写作
假如你是某英文报的小记者,针对当前流行“偷菜”网络游戏这一现象进行了采访,请就他们的看法写一篇短文,内容要点如下：
观点一
1.体验田园生活,享受乐趣
2.忘记烦恼,减轻压力
3.增长知识
观点二
1.沉迷网络,影响健康
2.耽误学习,工作
3.可能影响孩子的价值观.
开头已经给出!（我没打）
1.【Some people is optimistic about the game ,bacause of the born and quick city style,we have ni chance to relax ourselves ,the "Stealing vegetables" on line offer a place for us to observe the nature and enjoy ourselves,it can let the impress of live out and even improve our knowledge ranges.
BUt on the other hand,all in all game is a virtual life ,if you fell in the virtual life ,pay too much attention to the net,your healthy study and work and so on will get great affection from the game and the children maybe can't balance real and virtual life,they will realized that stealing in game is the same as stealing in life,how terriedly!】
2.【There are two kinds of opinions for the game.Reading it carefully,and thinking your opinionto it.
Some people think it nice to play the game they think that it can help people share the joy of the countryside's life.On the other hand,it also make people forget the annoyed things and recuse the pressure.What's more ,it can make people increase knowledge.
But some people think it bad to our life.Such as affecting the study and the work,influening children's opinions for valuement.It also make people be in the computer's world,make people's body bad.
Do you think it is good or bad?Thinking about yourself if you are also playing the game,Don't make you feel trouble.】
3.【Everyone has different thinkings in this game on the one hand,some of them think"stealing vegetables"on line can have a experiece on planting life.So it can enjoy a lotof fun.Meanwhile,it can make people forget their sadness and reduce their stress.
When we paly the game ,we also can improve ourself .One the other hand,the other think it is harmful to make people addicted to games,What's more ,it does harms to peoples health.Even though it can make people have trouble in studying and working.
Some times"Stealing vegetables"has bad effects on children's thinking.
All in all,I hope you can make a good time to have balance real life and have full in games.】
这是我们高二的一次英语考试,请评价评价这三篇,哪个好,好在哪里?又不好在哪里?满分30分,请打分!
第六部分 写作
假如你是某英文报的小记者,针对当前流行“偷菜”网络游戏这一现象进行了采访,请就他们的看法写一篇短文,内容要点如下：
观点一
1.体验田园生活,享受乐趣
2.忘记烦恼,减轻压力
3.增长知识
观点二
1.沉迷网络,影响健康
2.耽误学习,工作
3.可能影响孩子的价值观.
开头已经给出!（我没打）
1.【Some people is optimistic about the game ,bacause of the born and quick city style,we have ni chance to relax ourselves ,the "Stealing vegetables" on line offer a place for us to observe the nature and enjoy ourselves,it can let the impress of live out and even improve our knowledge ranges.
BUt on the other hand,all in all game is a virtual life ,if you fell in the virtual life ,pay too much attention to the net,your healthy study and work and so on will get great affection from the game and the children maybe can't balance real and virtual life,they will realized that stealing in game is the same as stealing in life,how terriedly!】
2.【There are two kinds of opinions for the game.Reading it carefully,and thinking your opinionto it.
Some people think it nice to play the game they think that it can help people share the joy of the countryside's life.On the other hand,it also make people forget the annoyed things and recuse the pressure.What's more ,it can make people increase knowledge.
But some people think it bad to our life.Such as affecting the study and the work,influening children's opinions for valuement.It also make people be in the computer's world,make people's body bad.
Do you think it is good or bad?Thinking about yourself if you are also playing the game,Don't make you feel trouble.】
3.【Everyone has different thinkings in this game on the one hand,some of them think"stealing vegetables"on line can have a experiece on planting life.So it can enjoy a lotof fun.Meanwhile,it can make people forget their sadness and reduce their stress.
When we paly the game ,we also can improve ourself .One the other hand,the other think it is harmful to make people addicted to games,What's more ,it does harms to peoples health.Even though it can make people have trouble in studying and working.
Some times"Stealing vegetables"has bad effects on children's thinking.
All in all,I hope you can make a good time to have balance real life and have full in games.】
我不知道现在初中生水平怎么样,只能以大学标准做参考所以分就不打了
我都读了一遍,第一篇水平较后两篇低,短语搭配问题较多,衔接词标点符号错误多.attention on ,pressure, 还有all in all的位置不对
第二篇与第三篇水平相似,以上问题出现较少,分数应该相似,非要评判第三篇结构稍好
我都读了一遍,第一篇水平较后两篇低,短语搭配问题较多,衔接词标点符号错误多.attention on ,pressure, 还有all in all的位置不对
第二篇与第三篇水平相似,以上问题出现较少,分数应该相似,非要评判第三篇结构稍好