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我的作文15分满分，只得10分。题目：记述一次学雷锋的经历。 It was Friday. I want to do some sports after school. I didn’t come back when it was two hours later. I came back to the classroom and was surprised to see that our classroom is totally a mess. And all our classmates have already gone. I was quiet sure that it is someone else’s duty to clean up the classroom. But I decided to do it myself. I picked out all the litters on the follr and washed the blackboard. Also, I washed the floor and watered the flowers. I spent half an hour doing them, but I thought they worthed the time. I felt a little tired after I finished cleaning. They were hard works after all. At that time, the blackboard was clean, the tables were tidy. And there was no litters any more. I really felt proud of myself, because everything was fine then. Finally, I went back home tired but happy. And when I saw everyone’s smiling faces the next day, I felt sweetness and joy from my heart. There was an old saying” A rose in hand, a favor in mind.” I felt great helping people and decided to do more things for others.
解题思路： 如下
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原文有多处表达不通畅，应做如下修改： It was Friday. I did some sports after school. When I came back to the classroom and was surprised to see that our classroom is totally in a mess. And all our classmates had already gone. So I decided to clean the classroom . I picked out all the litter on the floor and cleaned the blackboard. Also, I swept the floor and watered the flowers. I spent half an hour doing the cleaning, but I thought they worthed the time. I felt a little tired after I finished cleaning.It was hard work after all. At that time, the blackboard and the tables were clean . And there was no litter any more. I really felt proud of myself, because did a good deed . Finally, I went back home, tired but happy. And when I saw everyone’s smiles the next day, I felt sweetness and joy from my heart. There was an old saying” A rose in hand, a favor in mind.” I felt great and decided to do more things for others.
最终答案：略
解题过程：
原文有多处表达不通畅，应做如下修改： It was Friday. I did some sports after school. When I came back to the classroom and was surprised to see that our classroom is totally in a mess. And all our classmates had already gone. So I decided to clean the classroom . I picked out all the litter on the floor and cleaned the blackboard. Also, I swept the floor and watered the flowers. I spent half an hour doing the cleaning, but I thought they worthed the time. I felt a little tired after I finished cleaning.It was hard work after all. At that time, the blackboard and the tables were clean . And there was no litter any more. I really felt proud of myself, because did a good deed . Finally, I went back home, tired but happy. And when I saw everyone’s smiles the next day, I felt sweetness and joy from my heart. There was an old saying” A rose in hand, a favor in mind.” I felt great and decided to do more things for others.
最终答案：略