大师作文网作文如下,关于运气与成功有没有关系的文章
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作文如下,关于运气与成功有没有关系的文章
请大家拼命砸我,砸得越狠越好
We used to believe that success is always come from hard working.However,nowadays,some people have pointed out another opinion about success,"Luck is an indispensable factor in one's success." In my opinion,luck also plays an important role in an individual's achievement,of course,based on hard-work.
In many cases,working hard is essential for a person's accomplishment.Almost all of us,except those who are bring up in an noble family or whose parents are millionaires,need to pay great attention in studying.Entrepreneurs,for instance,cannot build any business without working hard and keeping learning.Politicians,as well,must study to have advantages to compete against his contenders.Take we students for example,if we don't study hard,we are not able to learn about the world,and then we will fail in exams,and finally,not armed with enough knowledge,we may also fail in this society.
However,luck does play an important role in a person's accomplishment.Sometimes we have done good enough,with knowledge of almost all sorts in this world in our mind,knowing enough about the world and our society to help us to survive and launch a business,we just need a chance.Mostly,luck acts as something like catalyst in one's success.For instance,Nicholas,one of my neighbors,is just such a person.After graduated from university,he is keen on building his own enterprise.However,as we all agreed that he is lack of money and experience,most of us did not believe his achievement in the future described by himself.And,no one was willing to lend money to him.Then,Nicholas was favored by luck.My neighbor,coming into a big fortune at his aunt's death,finally established his own company.Against all expectation,his company is very successful now.
And what is more,Luck sometimes can save a person.There are so many people in this world live in poor conditions and cannot get primary education.However,there are some individuals with rare genius among them.They just need a chance,to save them from the environment that not fits them well.Take my classmate Cathy for example.She was brought up in a poor western area of China,which is so backward that each of her family members can have a shower once a month.If she did not get the endowment from a philanthropist,she will repeat that constant life as her parents do.Only after her entering our university,we eventually realized that she is a promising person with great potential.She does well in almost all classes and is admired by all of us.That's how luck change a person entirely.
All in all,luck does work in an individual's achievement.It is very superficial to say that luck has nothing to do with success.
请大家拼命砸我,砸得越狠越好
We used to believe that success is always come from hard working.However,nowadays,some people have pointed out another opinion about success,"Luck is an indispensable factor in one's success." In my opinion,luck also plays an important role in an individual's achievement,of course,based on hard-work.
In many cases,working hard is essential for a person's accomplishment.Almost all of us,except those who are bring up in an noble family or whose parents are millionaires,need to pay great attention in studying.Entrepreneurs,for instance,cannot build any business without working hard and keeping learning.Politicians,as well,must study to have advantages to compete against his contenders.Take we students for example,if we don't study hard,we are not able to learn about the world,and then we will fail in exams,and finally,not armed with enough knowledge,we may also fail in this society.
However,luck does play an important role in a person's accomplishment.Sometimes we have done good enough,with knowledge of almost all sorts in this world in our mind,knowing enough about the world and our society to help us to survive and launch a business,we just need a chance.Mostly,luck acts as something like catalyst in one's success.For instance,Nicholas,one of my neighbors,is just such a person.After graduated from university,he is keen on building his own enterprise.However,as we all agreed that he is lack of money and experience,most of us did not believe his achievement in the future described by himself.And,no one was willing to lend money to him.Then,Nicholas was favored by luck.My neighbor,coming into a big fortune at his aunt's death,finally established his own company.Against all expectation,his company is very successful now.
And what is more,Luck sometimes can save a person.There are so many people in this world live in poor conditions and cannot get primary education.However,there are some individuals with rare genius among them.They just need a chance,to save them from the environment that not fits them well.Take my classmate Cathy for example.She was brought up in a poor western area of China,which is so backward that each of her family members can have a shower once a month.If she did not get the endowment from a philanthropist,she will repeat that constant life as her parents do.Only after her entering our university,we eventually realized that she is a promising person with great potential.She does well in almost all classes and is admired by all of us.That's how luck change a person entirely.
All in all,luck does work in an individual's achievement.It is very superficial to say that luck has nothing to do with success.
第一段：
1.We used to believe that success (is always come) from hard working.
改成：comes,come是实义动词,除非是现在时否则前面不可用be动词
2.some people have （pointed out another opinion） about success
改成：point out a different view,后面有in my opinion,这里最好不要再用another opinion,语法上无错,只是建议
3.luck (also) plays an important role in an individual's achievement
改成：also改成indeed,also“也”,indeed是“确实”的意思,如果前面说luck起了某个作用,这句用also是对的,但前面说有一种观点说luck很重要,这里作者是有些同意“确实”更恰当
4.based on (hard-work)
改成：his hardwork,his指代前面主句中的“an individual”,否则“靠努力工作”谁的不明确
第二段：
1.who (are bring) up in an noble family
改成：were brought,第一用被动语态,第二用过去时,表示“被抚养”
2.pay great attention (in studying)
改成：to study,pay attention to sth.,介词是to不是in,另外study本身可作名词表示“学校”
3.(build) any business)
改成：没有这样表示,建立生意-build up,发展生意-develop
4.Politicians,as well,must (study) to
改成：learn,study表示学习具体一门学科,学习知识用learn较多,尤其在后面跟动词不定式时,learn to do 的表示方式较好
5.compete against (his) (contenders)
改成：their rivals,因为指代的是politicians（政治家、政客）是复数,所以用their,另外contender一般指（运动比赛中）对手,非比赛的对手一般用competitor或rival,前面已经用了compete,所以这里用rival较好
6.(Take) (we) students for example
改成：us,take sb.for example的结构中,sb.是宾语,应该用宾格,“我们”的宾格是us；另外take应改成taking,因为这不是一个独立句子,是作后面句子的某个成分,所以用动词不定式或分词短语,这里用现在分词形式
7.,（and finally,not armed with enough knowledge,we may also fail in this society.）
改成：前面的逗号改成句号,否则本句过长,主谓不明.后面重起一个句子更清晰,Finally,we will not armed with enough knowledges nor make achievement in this society.
后待续,初步认为有一定水平,但基础英语语法点还较薄弱
1.We used to believe that success (is always come) from hard working.
改成：comes,come是实义动词,除非是现在时否则前面不可用be动词
2.some people have （pointed out another opinion） about success
改成：point out a different view,后面有in my opinion,这里最好不要再用another opinion,语法上无错,只是建议
3.luck (also) plays an important role in an individual's achievement
改成：also改成indeed,also“也”,indeed是“确实”的意思,如果前面说luck起了某个作用,这句用also是对的,但前面说有一种观点说luck很重要,这里作者是有些同意“确实”更恰当
4.based on (hard-work)
改成：his hardwork,his指代前面主句中的“an individual”,否则“靠努力工作”谁的不明确
第二段：
1.who (are bring) up in an noble family
改成：were brought,第一用被动语态,第二用过去时,表示“被抚养”
2.pay great attention (in studying)
改成：to study,pay attention to sth.,介词是to不是in,另外study本身可作名词表示“学校”
3.(build) any business)
改成：没有这样表示,建立生意-build up,发展生意-develop
4.Politicians,as well,must (study) to
改成：learn,study表示学习具体一门学科,学习知识用learn较多,尤其在后面跟动词不定式时,learn to do 的表示方式较好
5.compete against (his) (contenders)
改成：their rivals,因为指代的是politicians（政治家、政客）是复数,所以用their,另外contender一般指（运动比赛中）对手,非比赛的对手一般用competitor或rival,前面已经用了compete,所以这里用rival较好
6.(Take) (we) students for example
改成：us,take sb.for example的结构中,sb.是宾语,应该用宾格,“我们”的宾格是us；另外take应改成taking,因为这不是一个独立句子,是作后面句子的某个成分,所以用动词不定式或分词短语,这里用现在分词形式
7.,（and finally,not armed with enough knowledge,we may also fail in this society.）
改成：前面的逗号改成句号,否则本句过长,主谓不明.后面重起一个句子更清晰,Finally,we will not armed with enough knowledges nor make achievement in this society.
后待续,初步认为有一定水平,但基础英语语法点还较薄弱