有几个小练习我写的是否对

有几个小练习我写的是否对
写作练习
1、 Some people think that knowledge gained from books is much richer and broader that what can be learned from direct experiences.Do you agree or disagree with this view?Write a composition of 120-150 words within 30 minutes.
Reading Couldn't Take The Place Of Practice
In our modern life,our human people always get knowledge from books .As the knowledge gained from books is much richer and broader,we becomes lacking of pratices and direct experiences.
To my opinion,I don't agree with the view that only reading is enough.The practice in daily life is more important and necessary to us.As the explaining to the above,I thought when you are reading the knowledge in books,you only could see the appearance of affairs,and you couldn't catch the essential of knowledges.When you are facing the variety practices,maybe the problems would turn out to our sight.
According to this,we need to take more practices and to prove whether the theory is correct which we have got from the apppearance of the books.Then our career will fill with experiences,and when we meet challenges,we could hold our stable ability to face the fierce competition.
2 Write a composition about your experiences learning English as a foreign language.Describe your stages of learning English in detail.Remember to talk about your emotions in details.
The Experiences In learning English
Learning English becomes more significant in recent days.Everyone surrouding us try to learn it well.Unfortunately,to be a foreign language,learning English has made lots of barricades on the road to the man who wants to own it.But as to me,learning English couldn't be a hard job.Let me introduce my experiences.
when somebody wants to learn a language well,the vocabulary must be the key point.The words is just like the bricks of pyramid.If someone is not good at remembering words,he won't be a good learner.Although there is so many faster methods to help people fix the words,the hard working and the patience are still be the most important.After the decades of years' working,I have own five thousands words over and below.So that,my stage of learning English arrives at the medium level.As you are learning English,your emotions should be exciting and relaxing.It would let you become more active,and the efficiency could be more reasonable.
Learning English is not a simple work,it needs us to take much more effort on it.As you are owning the experiences in learning English,you will find that this language could be the best friend in your daily external communication.

好样!不过好长哦.
你写的不错,但还有些有点中文式了,具体的地方就靠你慢慢去发现了.
I hope you'll be best someday!