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大家来帮忙看看这篇作文能得多少分?英语?
if i have a lot of money ,i will buy a big house ,then ,i wlii help these people ,buy some food give them.travel around the wold with my family,i am sure ,my dream will come ture
要求50字
if i have a lot of money ,i will buy a big house ,then ,i wlii help these people ,buy some food give them.travel around the wold with my family,i am sure ,my dream will come ture
要求50字
首先这篇作文不太地道,大小写没有注意,其次,你用了过渡词很好,但只有then,你可以把first,besides,What's more,finally等用上去会使文章通顺.文章中有语法错误,比如help sb.with sth.give sth. to sb.sure后跟定从用that引导