第一篇 目前得分19.5

第一篇 目前得分19.5
Telling lies
What do you think about telling lies?When I was a little girl,my mother usually told me the story about a boy with sheep.He always tells villagers a lie there is a wolf chasing him.Eventually,he really came across to a wolf.Nonetheless no one trusted him,and then he died.The romance tells us we should be honest to others,and never tell lies to anyone.Do you think there is nothing right for telling lies?Now,I'll tell you what I think about telling lies.In accordance with the investigation,most people thought it is wrong to tell lies.I don't agree with them.The white lie can make people feel fortunately and happiness.It is a true story that about a girl.The little girl who had cancer is blind.The serious illness leads the girl dying.She dreams to drop in the Tian-An-Men,but she hadn't enough time.The physician and the girl's parents lied her that they have arrived the Tian-An-Men.The girl smiled and passed away.Generally speaking,every coin has two sides.Lies also can make people warmly.The lie isn't so dreadful like what you cogitate upon it.
第二篇 目前得分17.5
The National holiday
The National holiday is coming.Do you have a plan for your vacation?Now,let me tell something about the vacation of the National holiday.
As we all cognize,there is a seven days' vacation on the National holiday.On the one hand,it's really a good rest for us.We can go on vacation or visit our old acquaintances and do many things that you intend to do.You can have a journey with families and friends,enjoy the nature views and relax yourself.
But on the other hand,there are also some problems of the National holiday.Are you plan to have a journey?Are you really satisfied with your journey?I consider that the answer to the question is 'no'.There are too many people and cars,too much terrible traffic jam and traffic occurrences.All of them will influence tourists' mood of the journey.Can you see the scenic spots?No,you just see the thousands of people,or thousands of automobiles!
So what should we do?I suggest that the government should ensure the relevant departments,especially the traffic department.Try to let it conform to holidays.Only then,we'll really enjoy our journey not the traffic jam!
两篇作文要求字数120-200【貌似超了点】,

While most people think that it is wrong to tell lies,I disagree.They ignore harmless lies that are meant to make people happy.Those are what we often refer to as "white lies." There was a true story about a blind girl who was dying from cancer.The girl had always wanted to see TAM,but she never had a chance to do so.In the final days of her life,the girl's parents and her treating physicians told her that she was at TAM,which however was a lie.Eventually,the girl passed away without any regret.This example shows that sometimes lies can do good as well and should not be generally dismissed.
不知道你们的具体要求,随手改了改第一篇.
再问： 多谢啊，我换了一个句子就20分了……求帮忙改第二篇~~~OwO
再答： The National Holiday is a time for a good rest, but it is also a time for exciting journeys. With the seven days’ holiday, we can do whatever we have wanted but did not have time do so. For example, we can meet up with old friends whom we have not seen for a long time. Traveling with the family is another popular option.

My feelings toward the National Holiday are mixed. I have not yet made up my mind whether to go somewhere during the holiday. On the one hand, I would like to take the time to enjoy natural scenery and relax myself. On the other, I am concerned that there are just so many people going out at the same time that I probably will not be able to fully enjoy the tour simply because of traffic jams. I hope that the government, the traffic department in particular, can take up its responsibility to coordinate the flows of people to ensure that everyone has a good traveling experience.

根据lz的意思改的 虽然我觉得不怎么切题 毕竟问的是假期计划
另外我建议lz有些大词还是搞清楚意思再用。比如acquitances指的是泛泛之交，并不是friends完全的同义词。
再问： 阿里嘎多~~