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英语强人来,请改下我的演讲稿,
以下是我的关于"Australia as we know"的演讲稿(可能其中会有些语法错误),改好后请全文发送.
Australia as we know
Australia,the sixth largest country in the world,stands on Oceania.
In the long history river,Australia once was invaded by Britain.At last,it became the colony of Britain.Of course,Australian couldn't stand it.Therefore,they starded to resist.Finally,they succeeded,and Australia had their own National Day,Jan.26th.
Now,Australia has been listed into the Developed Countries(发达国家,不知道有没有拼对).Inaddition,its population has reached nearly 22 million.In other word,Australia has gone into the developed highway(迈入发展的快车道,不知道有没有对).
I strongly believe that the cooperation between Australia and China will get further development.As one of the largest countries in the world.These big countries including Ausralia and China will lead the world to go into the new century.
That's all.
Last but no least,I sincerely thank you for your listening.
Thanks!
请问为什么我在考试写作文时总是得9、10分，上不去，请问就这篇文章而言的我的作文有些什么问题，该如何去改正
以下是我的关于"Australia as we know"的演讲稿(可能其中会有些语法错误),改好后请全文发送.
Australia as we know
Australia,the sixth largest country in the world,stands on Oceania.
In the long history river,Australia once was invaded by Britain.At last,it became the colony of Britain.Of course,Australian couldn't stand it.Therefore,they starded to resist.Finally,they succeeded,and Australia had their own National Day,Jan.26th.
Now,Australia has been listed into the Developed Countries(发达国家,不知道有没有拼对).Inaddition,its population has reached nearly 22 million.In other word,Australia has gone into the developed highway(迈入发展的快车道,不知道有没有对).
I strongly believe that the cooperation between Australia and China will get further development.As one of the largest countries in the world.These big countries including Ausralia and China will lead the world to go into the new century.
That's all.
Last but no least,I sincerely thank you for your listening.
Thanks!
请问为什么我在考试写作文时总是得9、10分，上不去，请问就这篇文章而言的我的作文有些什么问题，该如何去改正
Australia as we know
Australia which is the sixth largest country in the world lies in Oceania.
Australia once invaded by Britain does not have a long histroy.and bacame the colony of Britain.People in Austria could not stand it any more,as a result,they started to fight for their independence.Finally,they succeeded,and Australia gained their own National Day,Jan.26th.
.In addition,Australia,as a developed Country,its population has reached to nearly 22 million.And by the way,Australia is undergoing a very fast pace of development.
I strongly believe in that the cooperation between Australia and China will be more harmonious and prosperous.As two of the largest countries in the world,the two big countries will both lead the world to the new century.
That's all.
Last but not the least,I sincerely thank you for your listening.
Thanks!
看楼主写作文的习惯,我退出楼主还是初中生吧,作文中有一些低级错误,而且用词太过简单,句型都是短句,好像你不太善于使用复杂句式.但是要知道,在作文中想得高分一定要有亮点.何为亮点?第一,要习惯使用高级词汇,一般出现在四六级中的词汇都属于高级词汇,这样会让阅卷老师觉得你词汇量很多.第二,要熟练使用复杂句式,如定语从句,宾语从句等.把简单的短句子用复杂句式表达出来会展现出你的英语功底,看起来也更地道.第三,叙事要清楚,切勿赘述.能用一句话解释清楚的话就不要用一段话来反复说明.要条理清楚,给阅卷老师耳目一新的感觉.第四,如果以上几点都能做到的话,建议你在作文中适当修饰一下.就是用一些比较高级的词组来点缀你的句子,让句子看起来长一点,地道一点,高级一点.这样写的出来的作文分一定低不了的.
Australia which is the sixth largest country in the world lies in Oceania.
Australia once invaded by Britain does not have a long histroy.and bacame the colony of Britain.People in Austria could not stand it any more,as a result,they started to fight for their independence.Finally,they succeeded,and Australia gained their own National Day,Jan.26th.
.In addition,Australia,as a developed Country,its population has reached to nearly 22 million.And by the way,Australia is undergoing a very fast pace of development.
I strongly believe in that the cooperation between Australia and China will be more harmonious and prosperous.As two of the largest countries in the world,the two big countries will both lead the world to the new century.
That's all.
Last but not the least,I sincerely thank you for your listening.
Thanks!
看楼主写作文的习惯,我退出楼主还是初中生吧,作文中有一些低级错误,而且用词太过简单,句型都是短句,好像你不太善于使用复杂句式.但是要知道,在作文中想得高分一定要有亮点.何为亮点?第一,要习惯使用高级词汇,一般出现在四六级中的词汇都属于高级词汇,这样会让阅卷老师觉得你词汇量很多.第二,要熟练使用复杂句式,如定语从句,宾语从句等.把简单的短句子用复杂句式表达出来会展现出你的英语功底,看起来也更地道.第三,叙事要清楚,切勿赘述.能用一句话解释清楚的话就不要用一段话来反复说明.要条理清楚,给阅卷老师耳目一新的感觉.第四,如果以上几点都能做到的话,建议你在作文中适当修饰一下.就是用一些比较高级的词组来点缀你的句子,让句子看起来长一点,地道一点,高级一点.这样写的出来的作文分一定低不了的.