英语作文语法Should we attend training classes?Today,it is becoming

英语作文语法
Should we attend training classes?
Today,it is becoming increasingly popular that students choose to have training classes in part time in order to gain higher marks in a variety of tests such as TEM.Graduate candidate test and so on.Should these training classes be favored?
When it comes to training classes,some think that is necessary,the other consider that is only wasting time and money.Just like a coin has two sides,training classes have advantages.First,we can know the subject and its goal clearly.Teachers will give us a logical summary and point out the importance.Second,we can make up the knowledge loopholes.Combined with self-study,training classes can be more valuable.Training classes also have disadvantages.First,it will upset our study plan.With attending training classes,we have to catch buses or ride bicycles.Since the weather is bas,sometimes we can’t arrive at training schools.Second,it will cost a great deal of money,which will increase financial pressure for our students especially for some poor students.
Third,not all teachers are appropriate to you.Teachers` method and teaching style are different that may not fit for us.
Although training classes are profitable for some students who can’t control themselves well,I prefer studying by ourselves.According to our different circumstances,we can control and allocate time freely and reasonably.It a effective way to company with another student who has the same goal with us.Exchanging our study material,we can obtain more knowledge.Encouraging each other,we can gain more courage.Having a good habit to study and rest is beneficial to study and health.
As for as I am concerned,we’d better pass tests by themselves.It a good time to improve our self-control and self-study ability.
写了一个作文,请高手给看看有哪些语法错误和不妥当的地方,并帮忙改正,感激不尽

可惜这里不能显示不同的颜色或加下划线.我直接改在上面了,加个括号表示好了
Should we attend training classes?
Today,it (has become) increasingly popular that students choose to have training classes in part time in order to gain higher marks in a variety of tests such as TEM,graduate candidate test （,ect）.Should these training classes be favored?
When it comes to(whether we should attending) training classes,some think that is necessary,the other consider that (it) is only (a waste of) time and money.Just like a coin has two sides,training classes have (both advantages and disadvantages你都说了事情的两面了怎么还能只说优点呢).First,we can know the subject and its goal clearly.Teachers will give us a logical summary and point out the importance.Second,we can make up the knowledge loopholes.Combined with self-study,training classes can be more valuable.（On the other hand,)training classes also have disadvantages.First,it will upset our study plan.With attending training classes,we have to catch buses or ride bicycles.Since the weather is bas,sometimes we can’t arrive at training schools.Second,it will cost a great deal of money,which will increase financial pressure for our students especially for some poor students.
(last but not the least英语的习惯最后一个不能向前面一个排列数字）,not all teachers are appropriate to you.Teachers` method and teaching style are different that may not fit for us.
Although training classes are profitable for some students who can’t control themselves well,I prefer studying by ourselves.According to our different circumstances,we can control and allocate time freely and reasonably.It a effective way to company with another student who has the same goal with us.Exchanging our study material,we can obtain more knowledge.Encouraging each other,we can gain more courage.Having a good habit to study and rest is beneficial to study and health.
As for as I am concerned,we’d better pass tests by （ourselves）.It a good time to improve our self-control and self-study ability.
看得出来,你是套用了模板的,写得还行,但是也能看出来你背了一些东西,可基础相对还是比较薄弱,预感不是很强,而且自由发挥的地方明显以简单句居多,变化较少,还需要多积累点东西才是