As the development of modern science and technology,some asp

As the development of modern science and technology,some aspects of traditional culture are being lost,so some people think that the traditional culture and technology will be the modern science and technology such as computer or internet,what is your opinion?
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Since modern science and technology welled up these days,a wide variety of traditional culture are being lost.A lot of people say that the traditional culture and technology has a tendency of being superceded by the modern science and technology such as computer or internet.Personally,I agree with that point of view,for the following reasons.
Modern science and technology has a lot of advantages rather than the traditional culture.Firstly,modern science and technology saves time.More and more people are using telephones or computers can appropriately justify that argument.For example,people prefer to use telephone or email to keep in touch with others.We can’t imagin that if only letters could be used to connect with a friend far away ,we would wait ages to receive a reply!Secondly,modern science and technology can make things done more easily.Traditional culture and technology usually has complex procedures .So scientists tries to find new ways or invent something to make things easy to be done ,such as the washing maching which help people to wash clothes.There are about 90% of people use washing machine for it is more covenient than old ways of washing clothes by hand.Last but not the least,using modern science and technology in some ways costs less money.One could surf the internet to get information which is free,while one have to cost some money to buy books to read.
However,modern science and technology has some limitations.As some of these technologies are only been used several years,they are usually not sophisticated enough.In these cases ,old ways are more useful ,for most of them have even stand thousand years of testing.
As is discussed,although modern science and technology has some limitations ,it brings us too many benefits ,for it is timesaving,easy to use and it costs less money.In conclude ,it is reasonable to believe that the traditional culture and technology will be replaced by the modern science and technology in the future.

感觉princess_todd的英语很不怎么样啊,benefit明显是可以作为名词用的,而且用得很多~it brings us too many benefits 是很地道的,在GOOGLE中搜索,绝对可以在英国人的网站上看到类似结构...晕...
我认为LZ的文章可以上6
雅思作文评分标准分四大项:任务完成,结构层次,词汇语言,语法运用.然后各项加起来算平均分.
LZ的词汇语言部分,高分词汇不多,特别复杂的句子也不多,但是看着感觉不别扭,一句是一句,感觉不像很多人为了写长句而写长句,或者是用套句,这种反而让考官看着觉得很不舒服,我估计LZ这部分至少可以达到5.5分;语法也有几出错误,不多,我自己看了一下,有一处单复数有明显错误(traditional culture and technology 好象应该算复数),但总体来说没有其他的明显错误,至少可以达到5.5分;LZ的结构层次部分是可以得高分的,简单明了,很清晰,开头点出中心--第二段着重写优点--第三段客观写缺点(但不过分)--简单总结,对于论点也能找到例子证明,很好,个人认为这部分有7分;对于任务完成部分,个人感觉至少有6.5.这样总的算下来LZ有6分.