大师作文网求大神修改英语作文,有悬赏,速来,谢谢!
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求大神修改英语作文,有悬赏,速来,谢谢!
An interesting thing
In the last National Day holiday,my parents and I traveled to Beijingand we were on holiday there.
We went shopping in the Front Gate Walking Stree first.There was very bustling.I wanted buy some presents for my friend,but I didn’t know what to buy.Suddenly,I saw two model planes,they were very cool.So,I asked the price.”It’s 21 yuan each.”said the boss.then,I was going to leave there,the boss said:”OK.Now,you can have them at 11 yuan.”Ithink for a moment,I said:”Can you get me 1 yuan to by bus?””All right,you can.”the boss said. I could give them to my friend!
I was very happy on that day,because it was my first time to bargain with a boss successfully.
An interesting thing
In the last National Day holiday,my parents and I traveled to Beijingand we were on holiday there.
We went shopping in the Front Gate Walking Stree first.There was very bustling.I wanted buy some presents for my friend,but I didn’t know what to buy.Suddenly,I saw two model planes,they were very cool.So,I asked the price.”It’s 21 yuan each.”said the boss.then,I was going to leave there,the boss said:”OK.Now,you can have them at 11 yuan.”Ithink for a moment,I said:”Can you get me 1 yuan to by bus?””All right,you can.”the boss said. I could give them to my friend!
I was very happy on that day,because it was my first time to bargain with a boss successfully.
第一行最后"we were on holiday there"应该改为“we spent our holiday there"
第二行"shopping in the Front Gate Walking Street"建议直接用"QianMen walking street",专用名词直接用拼音就好,你可以注意听公交车里报的站名
第二行"There was very bustling."改为"It's quite bustling there."
第二行"I wanted buy some"改为"I wanted to buy some"
第四行"then,I was going to leave there,"我想你的意思应该是装作不感兴趣离开,可以直接写"I pretended to be uninterested and leaving."
第五行"I think for a moment,I said"改为"I thought for a moment and said",注意时态
第五行最后"Can you get me 1 yuan to by bus?"改为"Could you please save me 1 yuan for the bus?"
第六行"All right,you can"可以改成"All right,you win"更生动,但原句意思也没错
不知道你有什么要求,就大概改了一些语法或者表述不太合适的地方.如果有具体的需求可以再补充问一下.
第二行"shopping in the Front Gate Walking Street"建议直接用"QianMen walking street",专用名词直接用拼音就好,你可以注意听公交车里报的站名
第二行"There was very bustling."改为"It's quite bustling there."
第二行"I wanted buy some"改为"I wanted to buy some"
第四行"then,I was going to leave there,"我想你的意思应该是装作不感兴趣离开,可以直接写"I pretended to be uninterested and leaving."
第五行"I think for a moment,I said"改为"I thought for a moment and said",注意时态
第五行最后"Can you get me 1 yuan to by bus?"改为"Could you please save me 1 yuan for the bus?"
第六行"All right,you can"可以改成"All right,you win"更生动,但原句意思也没错
不知道你有什么要求,就大概改了一些语法或者表述不太合适的地方.如果有具体的需求可以再补充问一下.