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A piece of love story Baby now I need you by my side !How can I throw out of all the pasts?Without you I can`t fall in love again... Untill you say goodbye to me ,I realize that you are a very important part in my life !Although we have a lot of happiness,all the pasts are past,please forget it!Anything can be instead of you! For you ,I lose all my friends,they are now not believe in me.Why do you leave me alone now? I now have no friend!My heart is hurt! Baby I ever don`t love you ,you give me a hot heart.You tell me everything is possible.The other day,you said if I had no friend ,you would stand up with me forever.Why do you choose to leave now ?My heart is hurt! Without you,the sun is not bright and the river is not clear!Baby,why do you choose to go without me at this time?Without you ,I miss the whole world! If now you can`t keep loving me ,why did you drive me to love you in the past?Now I have nothing only have you !If you still want to leave alone,I will try my best to grow up,I will try hard to forget all the rememberations that we have owned and forget all the things what we have gone through.All the pasts is a beatiful story! Baby,please allow me to say love you by the last time.From now on, you are you ,I am I,we are only friends!

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解题过程：
Baby now I need you by my side !How can I throw out of all the
pasts?Without you I can`t fall in love again...
1、改为throw out，及物词组 2、past一般不用复数形式，以下所有的pasts都应该改为past。
Untill you say goodbye to me ,I realize that you are a very important part in my life !Although we have a lot of happiness,all the pasts are past,please forget it!Anything can be instead of you! For you ,I lose all my friends,they are now not believe in me.Why do you leave me alone now? I now have no friend!My heart is hurt!
1、until的拼写错了。强调until时间状语从句的时候，把not也提前，而且采用倒装结构。同时时态应该用过去时。即：Not util you said goodbye to me did I realize that you were a very important part in my life！ 2、否定believe用don’t
Baby I ever don`t love you ,you give me a hot heart.You tell me everything is possible.The other day,you said if I had no friend ,you would stand up with me forever.Why do you choose to leave now ?My heart is hurt!
1、改为I had never thought of loving you but you were so kind to me.
Without you,the sun is not bright and the river is not clear!Baby,why do you choose to go without me at this time?Without you ,I miss the whole world!
1、 改为 lose
2、 本段位置应该上移，与第二段连在一起，这样段落意思比较统一连贯。
If now you can`t keep loving me ,why did you drive me to love you in the past?Now I have nothing only have you !If you still want to leave alone,I will try my best to grow up,I will try hard to forget all the rememberations that we have owned and forget all the things what we have gone through.All the pasts is a beatiful story!
Baby,please allow me to say love you by the last time.From now on, you are you ,I am I,we are only friends!
1、改为but
2、改为memories
3、改为that，这是定语从句连词，不用what
4、改为at，by the time一般表示时间段。

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