纠错 英语作文The Olympic is coming!Seven years ago,on July 13.Thir

纠错 英语作文
The Olympic is coming!
Seven years ago,on July 13.Thirteen hunderd million chinese were ebullient because of China gained the right to host the 2008 Olympic Games.Twenty-four years ago ,Xu Haifeng fulfilled chinese Olympic Games’ break-through from zero on gold medal record.Seventy-six years ago,the first chinese who joined the Olympic Games Xu Changchun got set on the racetrack lonely.
Look throgh the developement history ,we will fine that seventy-six years’ great changes of chinese Olympic Games’ history witnessed how China,a small ,closed,backward country became opening and strong .That converged so many generations’ hardworking and beautiful dream.
Since China won the bid for hosting the 2008 Olympic Game successfully,the rootstep of the Olympic is approaching .The 29th Olympic Games emblem “Chinese stamp dancing Beijing” release ceremany held in Beijing,the temple of Heaven Qi Niandian; Beijing unveils Olympic medals in gold and jade ;the clothing that the athletes were to receive their prize were made up of xiangyun and the flag red (国旗红).All the thing about the Olympic Games ,they all represented chinese acient ,traditional culture and the hospitality of thirteen hundred million chinese and they have also condensed the wisdom of a lot of designer’s.They show to the world that we are ready!A commercial,
globalization fast developing China is ready to welcome people from all over the world .
There are only 20 days of the Games start .Every one of chinese must realize the Olympic is coming .As a chinese,it’s our duty to make a good image to the world and make China stronger than ever.
The Olympic is coming!
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The Olympic（ Olympics) is coming!
Seven years ago,on July 13.(,)Thirteen(t小写） hunderd million（millions)(of) chinese were ebullient(+ed) because of(because of后面要加名词或名词性短语,自己改改吧~） China gained the right to host the 2008 Olympic Games.Twenty-four years ago ,Xu Haifeng fulfilled chinese Olympic Games’ break-through from zero on gold medal record.Seventy-six years ago,the first chinese who joined the Olympic Games（——） Xu Changchun got set on the racetrack lonely.
Look throgh the developement（of) history ,we will fine(改成find) that seventy-six years’ great changes of chinese Olympic Games’ history witnessed how (去掉how)China,a small(以下两个“,”去掉） ,closed,backward country became opening and strong .That converged so many generations’ hardworking and beautiful dream.
Since China won the bid for hosting the 2008 Olympic Game（s)successfully,the rootstep of the Olympic is approaching .The 29th Olympic Games emblem “Chinese stamp dancing Beijing” release ceremany held in Beijing,the temple of Heaven Qi Niandian; Beijing unveils Olympic medals in gold and jade ;the clothing that the athletes were(改成ware) to receive their prize were made up of xiangyun and the flag red (国旗红).All the thing about the Olympic Games ,they all represented chinese acient ,traditional culture and the hospitality of thirteen hundred million(+s+of) chinese and they have also condensed the wisdom of a lot of designer’s(改成s').They show to the world that we are ready!A commercial,
globalization fast developing China is ready to welcome people from all over the world .
There are only 20 days of(before) the Games start .Every one of chinese must realize(+that) the Olympic is coming .As a chinese,it’s our duty to make a good image to the world and make China stronger than ever.
The Olympic is coming!
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更重要的是你的学习要靠自己啊!下次注意啊：）