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雅思作文求批!
task1
the table demonstrates the information about variety kinds of poor people who lived in Austrilia in 1999.
Generally speaking,11% of citizens,approximately two million people living in poor standard.Furthermore,old people(e.g.single aged person and aged couple) and dink family are both below the average of 11%,with 6%,4% and 7% respectively.It can be seen that old people tended t be better off.
However,families which only contained one adults are more likely to live under a impoverished circumstances,representing 19% for those with out children and 21% for solo parent.On the contrary,the poverty rate has doubled.
As for family of three,it's the most commen type of family which accounted fof about 50% of the proportin of all households.The rate of poverty is similar to the average level.
Over all,the table show the data of poverty poputation in Austrilia.Solo-parent-family seems to be the poorest group around the nation.
task2
The table gives a breakdown of the different types of family who were living in poverty in
Australia in 1999.
On average,11% of all households,comprising almost two million people,were in this
position.However,those consisting of only one parent or a single adult had almost
double this proportion of poor people,with 21% and 19% respectively.
Couples generally tended to be better off,with lower poverty levels for couples without children(7%) than those with children(12%).It is noticeable that for both types of household with children,a higher than average proportion were living in poverty at this time.
Older people were generally less likely to be poor,though once again the trend favoured elderly couples(only 4%) rather than single elderly people(6%).
Overall the table suggests that households of single adults and those with children were
more likely to be living in poverty than those consisting of couples.

同学,第二篇经有道英语作文助手检查没有错误.下次你可以用有道英文助手,它很好的!

再问： 我想知道第一篇，第一篇是自己写的，第二篇是网上拉的，想做个对比
再答： 有图片呀，我发了，你可以点击那张图片就可以看大图，很清楚的。
再问： 还有不仅仅是语法，句式，词汇，结构都想改进
再答： The table show中的show主谓一致错误
语法
主谓一致是指：
1. 语法形式要一致，即单复数形式与谓语要一致。
2. 意义上要一致，即主语意义上的单复数要与谓语的单复数形式一致。
3. 就近原则，即谓语动词的单复形式取决于最靠近它的词语。

例句
语法形式一致：
误：He walk alone.
正：He walks alone.

意义一致：
误：His family are large.
正：His family is large.

就近原则：
误：Not only John but also Mary are going to Shanghai next week.
正：Not only John but also Mary is going to Shanghai next week.

poputation
in Austrilia出现
拼写错误
释义
population
n. 人口(可数名词)

commen
type
拼写错误
释义
common
adj. 共同的
n. 普通
比较级:commoner
最高级:commonest
commonly:副词
commonness:名词
50% of the
proportinproportion

拼写错误
释义
proportion
n. 比例
vt. 使成比例
形容词:proportionable
副词:proportionably
名词:proportioner
过去式:proportioned
过去分词:proportioned
现在分词:proportioning
第三人称单数:proportions
those
with outwithout语法错误
其他的没错误了。