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No pain No gain
I encountered a terrible thing when I was 10 years and I never forgot it,because at that moment I was between life and death.
I was born in a coastal city,the peoples of this city very fond of swimming in the sea and I always go to the beach after dinner,this had become my habit.That day of my story was a bad weather day and sea wind was so heavy,I was very overconfidence of my swimming technique,so still had went to the beach and swum in the sea alone,I was very excited so farther and farther away from the shore,maybe that is not very far for adult,but I dare say the water deeper than my height,the weather is getting worse,I realized the danger so decided to return to shore,but it's too late,a big wave came towards me suddenly then I choked a water and be swallowed by water,I tried to stay awake and exhausted all efforts to self help,but a big wave follow came again,then I was completely submerged into the water,I feel my consciousness gradually blurred even can't feel the pain,but a big hand caught me and pulled me to move,I do not know anything but I realized that I returned to the beach later,my father saved me and I cried the moment,I don't know why I was crying in that time,maybe because fear or felt happy,maybe I was moved.
Later I knew that my father always came to the beach with me,but never made me aware that him.My father gave me my life and my father saved me in the face of death,I do not want to thank my father here because in front of parents everyday is Thanksgiving.
There is a saying in China,just "the one who drowns is the one who is good at swimming",so after that incident,I always very careful when I was swimming,may be this is by falling we learn to go safely.
No pain No gain
I encountered a terrible thing when I was 10 years and I never forgot it,because at that moment I was between life and death.
I was born in a coastal city,the peoples of this city very fond of swimming in the sea and I always go to the beach after dinner,this had become my habit.That day of my story was a bad weather day and sea wind was so heavy,I was very overconfidence of my swimming technique,so still had went to the beach and swum in the sea alone,I was very excited so farther and farther away from the shore,maybe that is not very far for adult,but I dare say the water deeper than my height,the weather is getting worse,I realized the danger so decided to return to shore,but it's too late,a big wave came towards me suddenly then I choked a water and be swallowed by water,I tried to stay awake and exhausted all efforts to self help,but a big wave follow came again,then I was completely submerged into the water,I feel my consciousness gradually blurred even can't feel the pain,but a big hand caught me and pulled me to move,I do not know anything but I realized that I returned to the beach later,my father saved me and I cried the moment,I don't know why I was crying in that time,maybe because fear or felt happy,maybe I was moved.
Later I knew that my father always came to the beach with me,but never made me aware that him.My father gave me my life and my father saved me in the face of death,I do not want to thank my father here because in front of parents everyday is Thanksgiving.
There is a saying in China,just "the one who drowns is the one who is good at swimming",so after that incident,I always very careful when I was swimming,may be this is by falling we learn to go safely.
不劳无获
（这篇文章,可能要换种译法,未尝苦果,则无收获）
我10岁时,遇到了一件可怕的事情,因为那一刻我就在生死之间.
我出生在沿海城市,这个城市的人们非常喜欢在海里游泳,而我通常晚饭后就到海滩上去,这已经成了我的习惯.事情当天,天气恶劣,海上刮着大风.而我对自己的游泳技术过于自信,当时我太兴奋了,走得离海岸越来越远.也许那段距离对于大人不算什么,但是对于我而言,我敢说,水可以没过我整个人,天气更糟了,这时我才意识到危险,但是太迟了,一个大浪突然向我袭来,我呛了一口水,海水把我吞噬了,我尽力想保持清醒,竭尽全力自救,但又有一个个大浪打来,然后我完全沉入了水中.我觉得自己的意识越来越模糊,甚至对疼痛都失去了感觉,我什么也不知道了,除了意识到后来我被送回到海滩上,爸爸救了我,那时我嚎啕大哭,我也不知道为什么我会哭,也许因为害怕,也许因为高兴,也许因为我被感动了.
后来我知道了,爸爸总是跟着我来到海边,只是它从来不让我知道.爸爸给了我生命,在我面临死亡时,他又救了我,在此我不想刻意感谢爸爸,因为在父母面前,每天都是感恩节.
中国有句俗语,“溺死的都是会游泳的”.所以从那次事故以后,如果我去游泳,我就会非常小心,也许是因为吃一堑长一智.
When I was 10 years old,I encountered a terrible thing that I will never forget,because at that moment I was between life and death.
I was born in a coastal city,where the people are very fond of swimming in the sea and I always went to the beach after dinner,this became my habit.My story took place in a bad weather day,then sea wind was so heavy.I was too confident about my swimming skill,I went to the beach for swimming alone.So excited I was,I was farther and farther away from the shore.Maybe it was nothing for an adult,but I dare say the water was deeper than my height.The weather was getting worse,then I was aware of the danger and decided to return to shore,but it was too late,a big wave came towards me suddenly,water chocked me and swallowed me,I tried to keep awake and spared no effort for saving myself,but another big wave follow came,I was submerged,I was loosing my consciousness.I even could not feel the pain.But a big hand caught me and pulled me to move,I knew nothing except that I was returned to the beach later.My father saved me and I cried at that moment,I didn't know why I was crying.Maybe its for fear or cheer,maybe I was really moved.
Later I knew that my father always followed me without my awareness.My father gave me my life and my father saved me in the face of death.I do not want to say thanks to my father here because everyday should be a Thanksgiving Day when I is around my parents.
As a saying goes in China,"the one who drowns is the one who is good at swimming".Thus after that incident,I have always been very careful when I go to swim,may be this is by falling we learn to go safely.
（这篇文章,可能要换种译法,未尝苦果,则无收获）
我10岁时,遇到了一件可怕的事情,因为那一刻我就在生死之间.
我出生在沿海城市,这个城市的人们非常喜欢在海里游泳,而我通常晚饭后就到海滩上去,这已经成了我的习惯.事情当天,天气恶劣,海上刮着大风.而我对自己的游泳技术过于自信,当时我太兴奋了,走得离海岸越来越远.也许那段距离对于大人不算什么,但是对于我而言,我敢说,水可以没过我整个人,天气更糟了,这时我才意识到危险,但是太迟了,一个大浪突然向我袭来,我呛了一口水,海水把我吞噬了,我尽力想保持清醒,竭尽全力自救,但又有一个个大浪打来,然后我完全沉入了水中.我觉得自己的意识越来越模糊,甚至对疼痛都失去了感觉,我什么也不知道了,除了意识到后来我被送回到海滩上,爸爸救了我,那时我嚎啕大哭,我也不知道为什么我会哭,也许因为害怕,也许因为高兴,也许因为我被感动了.
后来我知道了,爸爸总是跟着我来到海边,只是它从来不让我知道.爸爸给了我生命,在我面临死亡时,他又救了我,在此我不想刻意感谢爸爸,因为在父母面前,每天都是感恩节.
中国有句俗语,“溺死的都是会游泳的”.所以从那次事故以后,如果我去游泳,我就会非常小心,也许是因为吃一堑长一智.
When I was 10 years old,I encountered a terrible thing that I will never forget,because at that moment I was between life and death.
I was born in a coastal city,where the people are very fond of swimming in the sea and I always went to the beach after dinner,this became my habit.My story took place in a bad weather day,then sea wind was so heavy.I was too confident about my swimming skill,I went to the beach for swimming alone.So excited I was,I was farther and farther away from the shore.Maybe it was nothing for an adult,but I dare say the water was deeper than my height.The weather was getting worse,then I was aware of the danger and decided to return to shore,but it was too late,a big wave came towards me suddenly,water chocked me and swallowed me,I tried to keep awake and spared no effort for saving myself,but another big wave follow came,I was submerged,I was loosing my consciousness.I even could not feel the pain.But a big hand caught me and pulled me to move,I knew nothing except that I was returned to the beach later.My father saved me and I cried at that moment,I didn't know why I was crying.Maybe its for fear or cheer,maybe I was really moved.
Later I knew that my father always followed me without my awareness.My father gave me my life and my father saved me in the face of death.I do not want to say thanks to my father here because everyday should be a Thanksgiving Day when I is around my parents.
As a saying goes in China,"the one who drowns is the one who is good at swimming".Thus after that incident,I have always been very careful when I go to swim,may be this is by falling we learn to go safely.