IELTS作文批改 题目是Successful sports professionals can earn a grea

IELTS作文批改
题目是Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays,people begin to pay mire attention on sports,which means sport starts being more popular.However,people hold two opinions about why these sports super starts can make a great deal more money than others that work in some important professions.
A group of people agree with the idea which is sports professionals could be paid by so much money.The reason is the body of people who play sports,might get some damage,and also sometimes the influence of damage is forever.In addition,the sport life for players is pretty short.Take basketball be an example,the great age for basketball players is 28 years old to 35 years old Therefore,players have to very work hard in these seven years.In other words,they earn great deal money only in seven years
however,other people disagree that.In their opinion,it is unfair to people who work in other important professions,since some profetionals need to learn more profetional knowladge,which means they get knowladge more than many people.Besides,government might needs these people to help to develop the country.
To my way of thinking,I prefer the first idea which is successful sports professionals to get a great deal money is reasonable.Due to their life of sport is short,and sometime players have to face the medias,that is why they have much pressure.

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