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The best man in the world
That year,he met her.He just had his 36th birthday,and she was a thin build 23-year-old girl,with reserved personality.He was stroke by her beauty at the first sight.She was so enchanting,and her beautiful eyes were so quiet and somewhat watching you helplessly,her long eyelashes,covered with endless sadness.
She turned his tender affection on.
They were both actors and the film was their first cooperation.They starred as male and female leads.At that time,he was Hollywood's big name,well-respected and universally adored idol,while she was just a nobody.She was made her debut with this film.Because of the film,they got together every day.Sometimes she was wreathed in smiles,appeared to be docile and petite but she could also act in the contrast way,being proud and aloof,as if no one could step into her sensitive and frail inner world.During that cooperation,he suddenly found himself blurred the lives in and out the film.
That was a classic successful cooperation.Every day,he would take care of her in every possible way.After every day’s shooting,they often walked along the river bank in the evening hours.The moon rose,saw the two side by side in twilight.They walked,and sometimes she would hold his hot hands with her cold ones.
At that time,his first marriage had come to an end,and he was so eager to get her love.However,she suffered her parents’ divorced injury,and was also afraid of the divorced.Thus she left him; they did not become lovers pitilessly.
September 1954,when she and her husband got married,he came from a faraway place to attend her wedding.In fact,her husband was introduced by him,who was one of his best friends.The wedding gift he gave her was a butterfly brooch.
January 20,1993,she left in her sleep for good,at the age of 63.He came to look at her for the last time,the one who was charming and petite all the time,the one who had eyes that were full of distressed.On April 24,2003,in the famous Sotheby's auction house,there was a auction of her clothing and jewelry,for the sake of charity.On that day,the 87-year-old man hobbled with his crutch,went there to bought back the brooch - the one he gave her as a wedding gift.It will warm his heart forever.
In the morning of June 12,2003,he went quietly.Can he meet his angle again in the heaven,just like half a century ago?
Their first cooperation is the film called Roman Holiday.She is Audrey Hepburn,the Princess in film history,and he is known as the most famous gentleman,Gregory Pike.Their pure friendship which goes beyond love touches the world.
Friendship becomes noble and holy when it’s beyond love.
Friendship goes beyond love when it’s noble and holy.

The best man in the world
That year,he met her.He just had his 36th birthday,and she was a thin build 23-year-old girl,with reserved personality.He was shocked by her beauty at the first sight.She was so charming with quiet beautiful eyes of long eyelashes,covered with endless sadness,touching everyone with her innocent natural sight.
They were both actors and that film was their first cooperation.They starred as main actor and actress.At that time,he was Hollywood's big name,well-respected and universally adored idol,while she was just a little potato where that film was her maiden work.Because of the film,they got together every day.Sometimes she was wreathed in smiles,appeared to be docile and petite but she could also act in the contrast way,being proud and aloof,as if no one could step into her sensitive and frail inner world.During that cooperation,he suddenly found himself blurred the lives in and out the film.
That was a typical success of cooperation.He took care of her in every-day-life.After every day’s shooting,they often walked along the river bank in the evening.The moon rose,saw the two side by side in twilight.They walked,and sometimes she would hold his hot hands with her cold ones.
At that time,his first marriage had come to an end,and he was so eager to get her love.However,she suffered the hurts of her parents’ divorce,therefore she was very afraid of being divorced.As a consequence,she left him; they did not become lovers pitilessly.
September 1954,when she got married with her husband,he came from a faraway place to attend the wedding ceremony.Actually,her husband was introduced by him - one of his best friends.The wedding gift he gave her was a butterfly brooch.
January 20,1993,she left in her sleep for good,at the age of 63.He came to look at her for the last time,the one who was charming and petite all the time,the one who had eyes that were full of distress.On April 24,2003,in the famous Sotheby's auction house,there was an auction of her acting cloth and jewelry,for the sake of charity.On that day,the 87-year-old man hobbled with his crutch,went there to bought back the brooch - the one he gave her as a wedding gift,the gift of which will warm his heart forever.
In the morning of June 12,2003,he went quietly.Can he meet his angle again in the heaven,just like half a century ago?
Their first cooperation is the film called Roman Holiday.She is Audrey Hepburn,the Princess in the history of film,and he is known as the most famous gentleman,Gregory Pike.Their pure friendship which goes beyond love touches the world.
Friendship becomes noble and holy when it’s beyond love.
Friendship goes beyond love when it’s noble and holy.
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