大师作文网（英语）请把以下作文改成第三人称
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（英语）请把以下作文改成第三人称
···and I think I'm kind of unhedalthy I hardly ever exercise.I eat Vogetables twice a week,but never eat thvts.A I don't like to drink mikek.Yuck!I love junk food and eat it three or four time aweek.I love to drink,too.So maybe I'm not very healthy,although I have one healthy habit,I sleep for nine hars ever night
···and I think I'm kind of unhedalthy I hardly ever exercise.I eat Vogetables twice a week,but never eat thvts.A I don't like to drink mikek.Yuck!I love junk food and eat it three or four time aweek.I love to drink,too.So maybe I'm not very healthy,although I have one healthy habit,I sleep for nine hars ever night
建议一下,一开始那85.8%没有提到,我觉得还是提一下的好.在你文章开头加上一句：“About 85.8 percents（注意这得是复数）of Middle-school students express they don't want to change their handwriting even it is not good.And refer to the reasons,there are kinds of reasons...” 第二,是percent得加复数 percents.第三,我觉得51.5 percents of students feel 这里,feel应该改成think会更好.第四,注意人称代词的混乱.还是51.5 percents of students这里,应该是第三人称,后面要用they而不是we.第五,32.3 percents 那里,你的复合从句用的太复杂,导致无数不必要的倒装句,看起来不像是一句话,很别扭.我改成：“32.3 percents of students think it is so busy that they hardly spend their spare time to practice handwriting.”具体的问题我一点点说.首先还是人称,we是不对的.然后,think之后的第一个从句,没有主语,所以要加上it is.而且你用的是复合从句,第一个that可以省略就略去了,这样看起来更简洁.还有,花费时间必须要用spend,do是错的.第六,后一段的I concered,我想不通你想用的是啥词.concered不是个词,而且近似的单词也没有符合你文章意思的…… 最后一点,最后一句我想你的意思应该是“我们应当建立一个规则去写出更好的字来”,可惜表达方式很成问题,这个句子从语法上是读不通的.我给你改成了“As far as our ancient social,handwritting has great effect on culture communciation.We should make an applicable rule for handwritting,to carry forward our traditional culture.” 其余的就没什么问题了,注意大小写,标点,能分段最好分三段,还有人称,复数.恩,想给我分也可以,不过我不需要那玩意,所以你看着办.我是你哥,再有问题QQ我就行.