剑桥4 test1 writing task1 请英文好的帮忙改错～

剑桥4 test1 writing task1 请英文好的帮忙改错～
In the present age,with the development of technology and individuals’ demands of communication,there are increasingly types of media appeared in our daily life.I have choice three kinds of them I think have both advantages and disadvantages.
First,television is the most effective medium for communicating information in my mind.It is reasonable due to the fact that people can receive up-to-the-minute coverage in any time.Moreover,there are varieties of choices for TV audiences; therefore,they have opportunity to distinguish right from wrong.In terms of disadvantages,it is obvious that the financial gap between urban area and the rural area should eliminated by the authorities.To be more precise,the government should invest more money in TV industries.
Secondly,radio is also an imperative way for communicating information.On the one hand,there are two words to describe radio---cheap and convenient.In fact,it is totally free and the signals are prevalent; thus people are able to listen to the radio wherever they want.On the other hand,when a person listens to the radio,he/she always has no choice but listen.
Thirdly,books are the most traditional way for us to get information.The aged tend to only rely on this medium to acquire information.Unfortunately,it is not popular in youngster due to the slow rate of update.
Overall,I would say that the television is the best way of conveying information.
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NOWADAYS,with the development of technology and PERSONAL demands for communication,INCRESING TYPES OF MEDIA HAS BEEN DEVELOPED.I WOULD LIKE TO COMPARE AND ANALYZE THREE OF THEM IN TERMS OF ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES
First,television is the most effective COMMUNICATION medium TO my mind FOR (the fact that) people can receive up-to-the-minute coverage(BU ZHI DAO) in any time.Moreover,TV AUDIENCES HAS GOT A NUMBER OF OPTIONS (FOR WHAT); therefore,they have OPPORTUNITIES to distinguish right from wrong.AS FOR disadvantages,it is obvious that the financial gap between urban area and rural area EXISTS AND should BE eliminated by the authorities.ANYWAY,the government should invest more in TV industrY.
Second,radio is also IMPORTANT for communicating information.RADIO CAN BE DESCRIBED BY TWO WORDS---cheap and convenient.ON THE ONE HAND,it is totally free and ITS SIGNAL CAN COVER A HUGE AREA,S0 technically people are able to listen to the radio wheENver they want.On the other hand,RADIO DEVICES ARE PORTABLE WHICH ALLOWS PEOPLE TO ACCESS TO INFORMATION WHEREVER THEY ARE.HOWEVER,YOU CAN NOT ACCESS TO THE VIVID IMAGE WHEN USING RADIO
Third,books are the most traditional SOURCE OF information.The elderly tend to only rely on this medium to acquire information.Unfortunately,it is not popular in young GROUP due to the slow rate of update.
Overall,I would LIKE TO say that the television is the best way of conveying information