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哪位老师能帮我修改下作文?
Does luck has anything to do with success?
There is a growing awareness that luck has nothing to do with success.Some people might be right to think that hardworking plays the most significant role in achieving success,while luck isn't deserved to mention;However,from my point of view,working hard do means a lot to success,but it's not the only reason for one's succeeding.
Here's a story I'd like to tell you.
Wendi is a fashion designer who has been working so hard for a long period since she graduated from university,and finally established her own brand.Unfortunately,her business generally stuck with various problems like a low sales volumn in an increasingly competitive market and she didn't know how to deal with them.Once a time,her situation was noted by a famous fashion counselor who happened to get involved in a TV show called Passion for Fashion.With the help of this kind man,Wendi successfully found out the main weak point .She was exactly the lucky guy who finally got rid of the frustration and now,her business runs well .
We cannot deny that there must exist other designers who suffered from the same problems ,but she is the only person getting away from the dilemma that makes her dream come true.You see,lucky do have something to do with success,you just can't recognize when it will happen or where it'll occur,even whether it will hit on you head.
Those evidences point to fact that luck has something to do with success.However,the most important thing we should bear in mind is that hard working still stands in the first place.As can be seen in Wendi's case,plenty of luck though she obtains,without working hard,success will never come to her life.Diligence is the basis of success even though success itself is related to various factors.
哪位老师能帮我修改下作文?
我感觉是
working hard does mean
而不是
working hard do means