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谁能帮我判判作文?我下个月8号就要考雅思了.
剑桥四 第一篇作文
我写的：According to the table,there were different categories of families living in poverty in Austualia in1999.
To sun up,there were 11%of the all husband living in the position deeply.It is about 1837000.It is noticeable that those consisting of only are parent or a single adult were more lakely to fall in trouble,with 21% and 19%.A common family and a family with no child was account for only 13% and 7%,which shands in marked contrast to then.
It is chear from the chart the relationship between sigle and couple appear proportion.Single adults were 2 times than couples without children(7%).
However,it didn't affect elder people too much.When they were not young,they were not to be poor.Single with 6%,and couple with 4%.
In conclusion,children trend family a lot in the table until they were old.
图表作文，不同的人生活在贫困的比率。
剑桥四 第一篇作文
我写的：According to the table,there were different categories of families living in poverty in Austualia in1999.
To sun up,there were 11%of the all husband living in the position deeply.It is about 1837000.It is noticeable that those consisting of only are parent or a single adult were more lakely to fall in trouble,with 21% and 19%.A common family and a family with no child was account for only 13% and 7%,which shands in marked contrast to then.
It is chear from the chart the relationship between sigle and couple appear proportion.Single adults were 2 times than couples without children(7%).
However,it didn't affect elder people too much.When they were not young,they were not to be poor.Single with 6%,and couple with 4%.
In conclusion,children trend family a lot in the table until they were old.
图表作文，不同的人生活在贫困的比率。
最基本的,词数不满150.
有单词拼写错误,这是不能犯得错误吖.例如第二段开头应该是“to sum up”.
to sum up应该用在最后.
时态应用现在时.
they were not to be poor是病句,应把to be去掉.
其它的.尽量找突出的数据例如最值点来陈述.还有,多用长难句.
因为不知道题目,所以不能评价太多.这文章...应该只有4.5.
有单词拼写错误,这是不能犯得错误吖.例如第二段开头应该是“to sum up”.
to sum up应该用在最后.
时态应用现在时.
they were not to be poor是病句,应把to be去掉.
其它的.尽量找突出的数据例如最值点来陈述.还有,多用长难句.
因为不知道题目,所以不能评价太多.这文章...应该只有4.5.