改作文 怎么写字数都不够 水平太有限

改作文 怎么写字数都不够 水平太有限
Some people believe that a person should never make an important decision alone.Meanwhile,those who are strongly opposed to is cite that a person should make an important decision with other people.From my own perspective,I support the latter one.
The first reason I put forward is that in a plural society,we must stress importance on the interpersonal relationship,cooperation and considering issue on the other people’s angles.If a run,which will became an inevitable serious problem.Due to everyone hold his/her own opinion insistently,the whole company,even the whole world will be paralyzed.
Second,if one person has a little wisdom and a lot of people may create more wisdom.When a person makes a decision complicatedly,he/she can turn to his/her friends for help.With the help,the decision will be more clearly to understand than before.At this time,the person also can get some good advice to improve the decision.
Third,on another angle,making decision alone can make a person more independent.Thinking by oneself gains the self-independence and promote one’s personal growth,which is beneficial to our career development.Making decision by a lot of people,which is a lack of privacy and little opportunity to oneself.
As can be seen from the above analysis,the advantages of making decision together are obvious,and the harmful aspect cannot be ignored.In collusion,we should make a decision with other people.

Making decision by a lot of people,which is a lack of privacy and little opportunity to oneself.
这句话好像缺乏主谓结构,问者再看一看,或者本人理解错了.
下面还有本人填补的一些句子,问者喜欢的话可以找合适的地方加进去.
Let`s agree to disagree.(让我们保留各自的意见,各抒己见）
If one guy exchanges an apple with another,then he will still own one apple,while if he communicates with another person,he will finally gain two thoughts.
The most important thing is that how to choose the proper one,how to distinguish the right and the wrong.Being independent is mnecessary,but divorcing oneself from the masses and from reality and acting blindly are worthless.
不知字数够不够,问者英语水平已经很不错了,本人汗颜,添了这几句,算是抛砖,估计您会看到更好的