大师作文网求帮我把我写的这篇作文的一些不对的语法什么的改正一下.
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求帮我把我写的这篇作文的一些不对的语法什么的改正一下.
因为这篇作文之后要在全班同学面前大声读出来.所以要保证其语法的正确性一类的.求帮忙看看有没有什么不该用的乱用啊,或者中文式英语在里面.
Dream
We often see thata child has a dream that he is drowned by the river.But in fact he just wetthe bed.Our brains always react some interesting things to tell us whathappened.Just we don’t understand its hint.
And now I willtell a dream about myself.That day,I watched the horror film at midnight.Youcan imagine how terrifying I felt at that time.Then I fell asleep.I rememberedI became a ghost wandering in the street.Everyone couldn’t see me.I’m soscary that I began to do some pranks to strangers.Just like break their cups,or take their handbag.Then I dreamed that someone called the priest to killme.The priest reading the bible,I felt uncomfortable and wanted to escape.WhenI felt the pain,I woke up.Then I found myself under the bed.
In China,a mancalled “zhouggong” can explain our dreams.Most people likes to ask him.So doI.But I get the answer that this dream imply that I can make a fortune.It’s soridiculous that I can’t believe it.Until now,I still don’t understand what thisdream try to tell me.I guess,it just show the fear that I own.I would ratherthis is my unconscious mind to tell me I will be a ghost.This is my dream.If youhave a better explanation,please tell me.
因为这篇作文之后要在全班同学面前大声读出来.所以要保证其语法的正确性一类的.求帮忙看看有没有什么不该用的乱用啊,或者中文式英语在里面.
Dream
We often see thata child has a dream that he is drowned by the river.But in fact he just wetthe bed.Our brains always react some interesting things to tell us whathappened.Just we don’t understand its hint.
And now I willtell a dream about myself.That day,I watched the horror film at midnight.Youcan imagine how terrifying I felt at that time.Then I fell asleep.I rememberedI became a ghost wandering in the street.Everyone couldn’t see me.I’m soscary that I began to do some pranks to strangers.Just like break their cups,or take their handbag.Then I dreamed that someone called the priest to killme.The priest reading the bible,I felt uncomfortable and wanted to escape.WhenI felt the pain,I woke up.Then I found myself under the bed.
In China,a mancalled “zhouggong” can explain our dreams.Most people likes to ask him.So doI.But I get the answer that this dream imply that I can make a fortune.It’s soridiculous that I can’t believe it.Until now,I still don’t understand what thisdream try to tell me.I guess,it just show the fear that I own.I would ratherthis is my unconscious mind to tell me I will be a ghost.This is my dream.If youhave a better explanation,please tell me.
先说第一句：Sometimes a child may get a dream in which he is drowning in a river.But the reality is that he is just going through bed-wetting.这一句里面你原本用的be drowned表示“已经淹死了",但我认为你想表达的应该是“溺水”.也不是被河淹死了,所以不用by,而用in,意思变为”在河里溺水了“,这应该是你想表达的吧?尿床也不对.还有句式也很混乱,你想引出一种现象直接描述即可,We often see既不合适也不必要,显得累赘.后面不合适的太多了,简要说说：Our brains always react some interesting things to tell us what happened没有这个句式,而且时态混乱,Just we don’t understand its hint.,just放在we后面才对.再后面就没法说了,说明显的几个the horror film改为a horror film how terrified I felt,I fell asleep改为I fall asleep break their cups,or take their handbag里面动词变为ing形式 the priest变为a priest reading改为read bible首字母大写,likes 改为like,后面还有类似第三人称单数错误与时态混乱,自己改改吧.
再问： reading改为read，我表示我这里用的是独立主格结构，其次时态混乱的那句Our brains always react some interesting thing s to tell us what happened表示的是大脑会告诉我们过去发生的事情...难道应该用现在完成时吗？没有这个句式是什么意思我表示后面的to do表示目的的话这样的句式也有问题吗？
再答： The priest reading the bible, I felt uncomfortable and wanted to escape确实是独立主格，独立主格也确实可以表示原因，但这里面有一个小细节：独立主格主要用于书面语，在口语和演讲稿中一般不用，因为容易让受话者不明所以。
你说”to“是”表示后面的to do表示目的的“那么问题来了，react是不及物动词，它做及物动词只有一个意思“起化学反应，使.......相互作用”，不常用，这个意思应该不是你想要的，react在这里你想表达什么意思？解答了这个问题我才能回答为什么我觉得没有这个句式以及时态混乱。除了三单，时态，词性和冠词问题，以及在口语中可以忽略的句法语法问题，还有两个细节①讲完一个故事不论是中国人还是老外都容易总结一句“这就是我的故事”，但请注意这是中国人的说法，你在英语中见到的一定是“That's my story""That's my dream". 而"This is......."是用在演讲的开头。②would rather后面你接了一个句子，可以，但接了就是虚拟语气，你没用，如果觉得这种假设没有到虚拟的程度那就改变句型。③that day,这个表达并没有什么玄的，就是”那一天"，句中和文中都常见，但你前面什么都没说就“那一天”，哪一天？
再问： reading改为read，我表示我这里用的是独立主格结构，其次时态混乱的那句Our brains always react some interesting thing s to tell us what happened表示的是大脑会告诉我们过去发生的事情...难道应该用现在完成时吗？没有这个句式是什么意思我表示后面的to do表示目的的话这样的句式也有问题吗？
再答： The priest reading the bible, I felt uncomfortable and wanted to escape确实是独立主格，独立主格也确实可以表示原因，但这里面有一个小细节：独立主格主要用于书面语，在口语和演讲稿中一般不用，因为容易让受话者不明所以。
你说”to“是”表示后面的to do表示目的的“那么问题来了，react是不及物动词，它做及物动词只有一个意思“起化学反应，使.......相互作用”，不常用，这个意思应该不是你想要的，react在这里你想表达什么意思？解答了这个问题我才能回答为什么我觉得没有这个句式以及时态混乱。除了三单，时态，词性和冠词问题，以及在口语中可以忽略的句法语法问题，还有两个细节①讲完一个故事不论是中国人还是老外都容易总结一句“这就是我的故事”，但请注意这是中国人的说法，你在英语中见到的一定是“That's my story""That's my dream". 而"This is......."是用在演讲的开头。②would rather后面你接了一个句子，可以，但接了就是虚拟语气，你没用，如果觉得这种假设没有到虚拟的程度那就改变句型。③that day,这个表达并没有什么玄的，就是”那一天"，句中和文中都常见，但你前面什么都没说就“那一天”，哪一天？