大师作文网帮我看一下这篇英语作文哪里错了
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帮我看一下这篇英语作文哪里错了
Nowadays,people have a lot of pressure.Where stress come from?What should they do to solve these problems?
Parents always want their children to be number one.Therefore they offer their children various class.However,many children hate most of the class.What's more,the children lost their freedom.In my opinion,parents should give their children more freedom and let them study independently.
Adults also has pressure.They should compete with their colleagues.It is hard to get appreciation from their boss.They must try their best to get along well with their customers.I think they should have more time to relax.And they can also talk to their friends,companion or the elder to solve the problem.
The elder has retired.It is time to enjoy themselves.However they also have pressure.They have no income.When they get older,they will have a lot of health problems.And they often feel lonely.So I suggest the young care for their parents more and spend more time with them.
Nowadays,people have a lot of pressure.Where stress come from?What should they do to solve these problems?
Parents always want their children to be number one.Therefore they offer their children various class.However,many children hate most of the class.What's more,the children lost their freedom.In my opinion,parents should give their children more freedom and let them study independently.
Adults also has pressure.They should compete with their colleagues.It is hard to get appreciation from their boss.They must try their best to get along well with their customers.I think they should have more time to relax.And they can also talk to their friends,companion or the elder to solve the problem.
The elder has retired.It is time to enjoy themselves.However they also have pressure.They have no income.When they get older,they will have a lot of health problems.And they often feel lonely.So I suggest the young care for their parents more and spend more time with them.
第一段 Where stress come from?应该是 Where does the stress come from?
第二段 class 改为 classes
第三段Adults also has pressure.has 改为have,boss 改为bosses
这是从语法方面来说的.
内容上：
第二段主要描述的是孩子们的压力,要具体说父母望子成龙望女成凤,所以给孩子报了很多特长班之类的课程,父母的期望给了孩子很大的压力,让孩子失去了自由,父母要理解孩子,不要给孩子报那么多课程,尽量选择孩子感兴趣的课程,这样才能两全其美.
最后最好总结一下,要不然太突兀的就结束了.
再问： 还有什么错误的地方吗？
再答： 暂时没发现有什么了。我想问下，这是什么级别的作文？这样可以根据不同的级别换一些词汇，让作文更出彩
再问： 是大学平时布置的作文？请问我改怎么改才更好呢？谢谢！
再答： 大学的话，尽量多用一些高级词汇，英语中可以用很多词表示一个意思，建议多去看看写作高级词汇句式什么的，如果有需要Q我，我这有一些文档可能对你有用332443067
第二段 class 改为 classes
第三段Adults also has pressure.has 改为have,boss 改为bosses
这是从语法方面来说的.
内容上：
第二段主要描述的是孩子们的压力,要具体说父母望子成龙望女成凤,所以给孩子报了很多特长班之类的课程,父母的期望给了孩子很大的压力,让孩子失去了自由,父母要理解孩子,不要给孩子报那么多课程,尽量选择孩子感兴趣的课程,这样才能两全其美.
最后最好总结一下,要不然太突兀的就结束了.
再问： 还有什么错误的地方吗？
再答： 暂时没发现有什么了。我想问下，这是什么级别的作文？这样可以根据不同的级别换一些词汇，让作文更出彩
再问： 是大学平时布置的作文？请问我改怎么改才更好呢？谢谢！
再答： 大学的话，尽量多用一些高级词汇，英语中可以用很多词表示一个意思，建议多去看看写作高级词汇句式什么的，如果有需要Q我，我这有一些文档可能对你有用332443067