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I saw a film called Haarry Potter and the Half-Blood prince last week.It is a fantasy film.And the leading caracters are ..(忽略).I think Harry is handsome and Hermione is pretty.The film is set in Hogwarts Magic school.The Magic School is very big and beautiful.The stories are talked about Harry Potter during his sixth year.It is full of funand amazing things.The actors are both clever and brave.I like them very much.And I feel so surprised in the film's stunts and effects.The film is wonderful and looks amazing.I love it very much.
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I saw a film called Haarry Potter and the Half-Blood prince last week.It is a fantasy film.And the leading caracters are ..(忽略).I think Harry is handsome and Hermione is pretty.The film is set in Hogwarts Magic school.The Magic School is very big and beautiful.The stories are talked about Harry Potter during his sixth year.It is full of funand amazing things.The actors are both clever and brave.I like them very much.And I feel so surprised in the film's stunts and effects.The film is wonderful and looks amazing.I love it very much.
1.Haarry改成Harry
2.第一行第三句话不需要And
3.第三行The stories are talking about...
4.第四行的It指代不明确,建议改成Harry's life is full of fun and amazing things.
5.第五行,首先注意时态,然后是固定搭配的用法,建议改成And I felt so surprised at the stunts and effects in the film.
6.倒数第二句话,不需要looks,look作为系动词多用在形容外表之类的.另外,看电影应该用watch.
7.句子过于单调,且时态需要注意.其他一些有争议的地方比如哈利与赫敏两个人到底能不能统称为actors（女演员是actress）,这个我就没有仔细研究了.
2.第一行第三句话不需要And
3.第三行The stories are talking about...
4.第四行的It指代不明确,建议改成Harry's life is full of fun and amazing things.
5.第五行,首先注意时态,然后是固定搭配的用法,建议改成And I felt so surprised at the stunts and effects in the film.
6.倒数第二句话,不需要looks,look作为系动词多用在形容外表之类的.另外,看电影应该用watch.
7.句子过于单调,且时态需要注意.其他一些有争议的地方比如哈利与赫敏两个人到底能不能统称为actors（女演员是actress）,这个我就没有仔细研究了.