请问我的英语作文哪里错了吗?请指出,然后把句子改一下.明天要用!

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请问我的英语作文哪里错了吗?请指出,然后把句子改一下.明天要用!
Hello,every one.First,I would like to ask you a question.Am I beautiful?Oh,I think I'm pretty.Nonsense not say,please listen to my self-introduction.
I'm a very special girl.Can be said to be the change character.Sometimes I am very quiet,sometimes I am particularly lively.Quit time,I can read books in the library until lunch time.And I can play the violin.The violin is gorgeous,elegant.Play it,I feel as if I was a graceful angel.When I dance,will become especially lively.Latin dance cha-cha,rumba,samba,jive and paso doble.They give people a different feeling,passion for cha-cha,rumba tenderness,dynamic samba and jive,the mighty paso doble.I'm good at the every dance,I think I'm special.
I'm one of a kind,isn't it?

1.would like to改成want to
2.问时是beautiful,回答也应用beautiful
3..Quit time前边得加in吧!
4.I can read books in the library until lunch time的can去掉
5.Play it前面加when I
6.I feel as if I was a graceful angel.这句话的as if 去掉
7.will become 前面加I
8,I think I'm special前面加so.

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