大师作文网以下是鄙人写的主题为建国六十周年带来变化的作文,帮忙看一下有没有语法错误：
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以下是鄙人写的主题为建国六十周年带来变化的作文,帮忙看一下有没有语法错误：
All the changes in my life
I like to draw,and I can draw well.But many years ago,the small town where I live has not drawing tools.So I can not draw
what I want to draw.
But now,Tremendous changes have taken place here.First of all,
I can buy drawing tools via the Internet,it is so easy I only need
to complete address and telephone number,after few days,I will get
my mew drawing tools!It is really fast By the way,the postman is
friendly and the drawing tools which I bought is very nice!
New,I can draw every thing what I want to draw.What a good thing!All this is thanks to the reform and opening up!I realized my dream at last.
如果全对的话，提几条建议也行，我觉得还是太短了，能不能帮忙加点？加的好的话还可以提高悬赏
All the changes in my life
I like to draw,and I can draw well.But many years ago,the small town where I live has not drawing tools.So I can not draw
what I want to draw.
But now,Tremendous changes have taken place here.First of all,
I can buy drawing tools via the Internet,it is so easy I only need
to complete address and telephone number,after few days,I will get
my mew drawing tools!It is really fast By the way,the postman is
friendly and the drawing tools which I bought is very nice!
New,I can draw every thing what I want to draw.What a good thing!All this is thanks to the reform and opening up!I realized my dream at last.
如果全对的话，提几条建议也行，我觉得还是太短了，能不能帮忙加点？加的好的话还可以提高悬赏
第二句时态是过去式
it is so easy 前加for 或 because
mew 改成 new
after few days 加个 a
你第二段有First of all,但没下文了,比如second ,finally 等
it is so easy 前加for 或 because
mew 改成 new
after few days 加个 a
你第二段有First of all,但没下文了,比如second ,finally 等