批改英语作文rencently it is generally accepted that on a harmoniou

批改英语作文
rencently it is generally accepted that on a harmonious life is so iimportant for every on who leave in the dormitory.
if you do not have a harmonious dormitory.firstly,one of the impact from this phenomenon may bring negative influence into your study.additionally,a good,happy,leaving invironment is very important for us.
it is no doubt that making a harmonious dormitory life will bring about far-reaching influence .as for me,lot of things i can do for the harmonious dormitory.for one thing,we should be stricting with ourself and lenient towards others.for another,we should regard our dormitory as our second home.if we follow the mentioned above,i believe we will harvest a wonderful dormitory life.
有错的地方帮我改一下,语法错误帮我解释一下.在此谢过~
最好提点语法错误

[头一个字母大写,“recently” 不需要,因为和谐生活不是“最近”才需要的.]
It is generally accepted that [不需要"on"] a harmonious life is [不需要"so"] important for everyone [everyone为一个字] who lives [leave:离开；live:生活] in the dormitory.
[大写!]If you do not have a harmonious dormitory [句子不完整,所以我把句号改逗号],this [太多字了,无意.“this” 一字概括了全意] may bring negative influences [这里用复数] to [into改为to] your study.Thus[additionally:再说；thus/so:所以.也可用 “So”],a good,happy,living [leave:离开；live:生活] environment [不是invironment] is very important for us.
There [it:这个,用不对] is no doubt that making dormitory life harmonious [我改为：把宿舍生活变得更和谐] will bring about far-reaching influences [这里用复数].[不需要as for us]There are [这里需要动词,“are”为动词] lots of things [lots of things 或a lot of things,不能用lot of things] we [你后面用 “we”,所以这里要相应] can do for a [a:一个,the:那一个；意思有点不一样] harmonious dormitory.[大写!]For one thing,we should be strict [stricting 不是字]with ourselves [myself:单数；ourselves:复数] and lenient towards others.Also [大写!不能说for another],we should regard our dormitory as our second home.[大写!]If we follow the above mentioned [没有解释,英语习惯上会这样用],I believe we will have [英语不会这样用“收获”] a wonderful dormitory life.
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It is generally accepted that a harmonious life is important for everyone who lives in the dormitory.
If you do not have a harmonious dormitory,this may bring negative influences to your study.Thus,a good,happy,living environment is very important for us.
There is no doubt that making dormitory life harmonious will bring about far-reaching influences.There are lots of things we can do for a harmonious dormitory.For one thing,we should be strict with ourselves and lenient towards others.Also,we should regard our dormitory as our second home.If we follow the above mentioned,I believe we will have a wonderful dormitory life.
可能解释不太全面,因为我从小讲英语,所以不会解释语法,都靠直觉,却也准确.